This story about my unforgettable moment. Last year me and me friends had plan to go to Jogjakarta . We went there to spent our holiday because we have just graduate from senior high school . The night before i prepared my self to go there , i prepare what i brought to went there, such as prepare my clothes , prepare my money . i imagine that my trip is very interested.
Finally we decide to went there by train , in the next morning we come together in Wonokromo railway station . we went there by economic train, did you know how much the ticket ? . it so cheaper just Rp 21.000 . But when the Train arrived we were very surprise , why ? because in train was to many people . so crowded did you know, until me and my friends didnt get chair.so we have to stood up until Madiun , with many sellers , many people , many goods , smell not good . so could you Imagine that ? we were very suffered .
After the train arrived in Madiun we got chair , so we can remove our tired , we can enjoyed the trip. In Madiun i was very interest with salad , i think its look delicious . so i bought it . but i was very suprised again , that salad consist of tempe , and spinach,just that. if i remember that event , i want to laugh . on the trip there are many people to sell kinds of traditional foods . from solo , madiun , Lamongan , and etc.
Until arrived in lempuyangan railway station we got problem,we didnt know where will we go ? because no one from us didnt know about Jogjakarta. So we decide to went to Malioboro . We went there on foot , we jus followed our feeling. I think Malioboro place was not to far from Lempuyangan,it's about 3 km. but in the middle of the trip we have chased by dog , so we ran quickly until my sandal is lost , the middle of no where.and my friend was falled.Oh god so tragic our destiny . why it happend to us . At the moment i felt like Crazy people. until arrived in Malioboro i directly bought sandals and check in in a hotel . finally we slept all long day to remove our tired.
Finally we decide to went there by train , in the next morning we come together in Wonokromo railway station . we went there by economic train, did you know how much the ticket ? . it so cheaper just Rp 21.000 . But when the Train arrived we were very surprise , why ? because in train was to many people . so crowded did you know, until me and my friends didnt get chair.so we have to stood up until Madiun , with many sellers , many people , many goods , smell not good . so could you Imagine that ? we were very suffered .
After the train arrived in Madiun we got chair , so we can remove our tired , we can enjoyed the trip. In Madiun i was very interest with salad , i think its look delicious . so i bought it . but i was very suprised again , that salad consist of tempe , and spinach,just that. if i remember that event , i want to laugh . on the trip there are many people to sell kinds of traditional foods . from solo , madiun , Lamongan , and etc.
Until arrived in lempuyangan railway station we got problem,we didnt know where will we go ? because no one from us didnt know about Jogjakarta. So we decide to went to Malioboro . We went there on foot , we jus followed our feeling. I think Malioboro place was not to far from Lempuyangan,it's about 3 km. but in the middle of the trip we have chased by dog , so we ran quickly until my sandal is lost , the middle of no where.and my friend was falled.Oh god so tragic our destiny . why it happend to us . At the moment i felt like Crazy people. until arrived in Malioboro i directly bought sandals and check in in a hotel . finally we slept all long day to remove our tired.
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I think your paragraph is great.......
BalasHapusBut in your sentence
"Last year me and me friends"
u can edit with
" Last year me and my friends"
And your sentence
"The night before i prepared my self to go there , i prepare what i brought to went there"
u can use capital word for subject
"The night before I prepared my self to go there , I prepare what I brought to went there"
And also many sentence can you edit for it.
your paragraph should not word finally in center paragraph,.it in finally paragraph
BalasHapusyour grammar is have little mistakes,.
elok 120810486G
i think your paragraph is good ..
BalasHapusbut i found some mistakes ..
like 'so cheaper' what you want compare ?
you can write so cheap .
and plural nouns .
you can rewrite about that .
keep in good writing :)
(Ranti P. Nastiti 120810190G)
i think your paragraph is good enough..
BalasHapusbut i still look some mistakes there,especially about your grammar...
but your story is interest for me..
Hmm,,that's fantastic experience I think...
BalasHapusu described it clesrly, n u use understanding language...
but there are some mistakes on ur paragraphs..
such as:
-to spent, it should be spend,coz after "to' verb 1
-we come, it should be came, coz it happen on the pas..
but so far it's good..
by: 120810493 G
Hi..
BalasHapusthanks for comment my blog..
I think your paragraph is good.
But there are a lot of mistake,
Me and my friend, i think you should write my friend and I,
Check conditional sentence too..
Pratiwi Ramandita 120810487G
hy......
BalasHapusI think your paragraph good enough...
But stiil find some mistakes in your paragraph....
So, I think you must back repair your writing,,,,
But so far is good....
by:Ria Anggraini.S
120810492G
thx for your comment dir. .
BalasHapusi think your paragraph is good enough. .
but i found some mistake word?
huh. . . .repair it, okey!
see you. .
. . . . .Rico. . .
i think your paragraph is good but i still find some mistake in your paragraph
BalasHapusplease check your words again
and don't forget give me comment too.
thanks for your comment guys ..
BalasHapusi will repair my paragraph , and i hope it will better than before ..